Tell me ur opinion on this poem... yeah poem thats what we'se finna call dis. Thanks, luv y'all
///-Hook
(Let's Go)
('24)
Countin' them dollars
And pesos
Gettin' that cheese
Like queso
From the underground
Like Paso
Young n' broke
Like Layso
Pop ten shots
Then I reload
Bout to blow up
like J.Cole
Y'all want the smoke
Then say some
Talk like drizzy
Said say some (say some)
///-Verse 1
Spitting them facts
In yo face, h*
Pumpin' that throttle
And I don't slow (down)
Runnin' this game
Ion play tho
Chill in the house
I stay low
Breakin' them records
And they stay broke
Trustin' in god
I ain't prey though
Apex Predator
I hunt y'all
Y'all playin' checker's
This is chess tho
Honest opinion: Free poems are better for rap rather than old complicated poems with the same construction. البحتري and contemporain poets of his time has the best era for poems, despite in arabic.
@WassimBerbar said in #2:
> Honest opinion: Free poems are better for rap rather than old complicated poems with the same construction. البحتري and contemporain poets of his time has the best era for poems, despite in arabic.
Ok, but do u mess wit the bars?
You mean rap?
@CDRED said in #4:
> You mean rap?
I mean my rap coolio, ya know, MA in the house type sht?
@Zurel said in #3:
> Ok, but do u mess wit the bars?
The poem you wrote is a "free poem". it has only one section per line, and the poet is free from poem necessities (unlike old poems, where you have to do the same rime and use the same meter for both line sections). About the poem in itself, I the only word I understood is "chess". The subject is unclear, is it about playing chess at home or guns reloading and shooting? Is it titled? What did you want to express through the poem?
@WassimBerbar said in #6:
> The poem you wrote is a "free poem". it has only one section per line, and the poet is free from poem necessities (unlike old poems, where you have to do the same rime and use the same meter for both line sections). About the poem in itself, I the only word I understood is "chess". The subject is unclear, is it about playing chess at home or guns reloading and shooting? Is it titled? What did you want to express through the poem?
The whole track rhymed man
@Zurel said in #7:
> The whole track rhymed man
But yeah, you can also use rimes in free poems lol. You really have to pronounce it perfectly to make it rime.
Man like here the rest of the track
///-Verse 2
They pumpin' narcotics
These people psychotic
I'm taggin' they bodies
They can't say they not it
They thinkin' goated
I show them they not sh*t
The bars they be potent
I wipe out opponents
I kill opposition
I play my position
At PG, we winnin'
AT QB, We winnin'
At center I'm blocking
Like Gretzky, I'm shooting
These b**** like talkin'
But they ain't gon' do sh*t
So tell where you finna go
If you ain't ever work for sh**
So tell them petty little h**
They can hop off yo d**k
So tell what u finna do
When You forty and broke
Yo *ss finna watch me
Drop forty, you get smoked
I said, they pumpin' narcotics
Hearts cold like the artic
Some say I'm obnoxious
Some say I got swagger
But I don't be jagger
Nah Ion be Kendrick
Nah Ion be cole
Nah Ion be shady
And I'm not White Gold
But one thing I is
The one, so leave it untold
If u aint like idk, the bars be double entendres, so it be confusing fo peeps not from the streets
